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L.J. Gearing's avatar

Really interesting discussion. Switching between tenses and perspectives can certainly have a profound effect. However, thinking about it in the context of the first lines of a narrative is probably doubly difficult, because crafting an opening must surely be one of the hardest tasks by itself.

I definitely prefer the past tense, either first or third person. It is perhaps too logical an approach to take, but surely, if one is reading something, it has happened, it has been written down—passed into the past! That feels most comfortable to me.

I do find first person present to be somewhat acceptable, but the present feels too immediate for third person. In first person present, I can imagine being inside the head of the character, thinking at the same speed and experiencing the world at the same time. The distance of third person combined with this immediacy is jarring, perhaps deliberately so, but jarring nonetheless, so I find it difficult to engage with. From this perspective, the author seems to be commentating live while observing the events of the novel, as if the story were some sort of sporting contest.

However, the third-person-present book that comes to mind is “Wolf Hall” by Hilary Mantel; my heart sank when I first realised that it had been written like this, but I persevered, read the sequel, waited impatiently for a few years and finally bought the third novel in hardback as soon as it was published, so it cannot have been that much of a problem!

Worst of all, though, from either perspective, would be the present continuous tense. I am writing in the present continuous tense and I am already losing the will to live. Nathan is reading this sentence and he is surely agreeing with me.

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Alexander Ipfelkofer's avatar

Openings, openings, openings! I swear I did not see this one but of course, it's on all of our minds. Pesky opening lines. Thanks for linking me this. I do not like first-person too much. Although I cannot imagine Robinson Crusoe in third-person, it would be a completely different book. So without knowing more about the whole project, I can't tell if it would work overall. I do find it more difficult to write in first person (too many Is), though, than in third, but I get your concern about immediacy. Present tense. Hm. It's what I use for the screenplay I am writing, it needs to be in present tense and it's fine there since the scene descriptions are short. First and foremost, trust your instinct. You notice some "tells," you take care of them. Leave the opening if you're stuck and come back to it once you are done with the ending.

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