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Sharron Bassano's avatar

I find myself wondering why she is so short-tempered with him... Maybe she is rude with every one? And if so, why? What has hurt her so badly in the past? I will look for the answer...

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Nathan Slake's avatar

The answer will take some time to fully wheel around :)

Thanks for going through all of these, Sharron. That means a lot.

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Kimberly Warner's avatar

The way the map “got to” sit within her belt... such a revealing choice of words. I wish I knew what he sayid about her father... these characters are so vulnerable and real already.

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Renn has a warm, fuzzy place in my heart. Well, they both do, but having to inhabit Renn's mind has brought me so much joy (and possibly some heartache ...)

Thanks so much for reading!

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Kimberly Warner's avatar

I feel your joy and investment when I read it!

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Beth T (BethOfAus)'s avatar

‘“Cartographers don’t draw trees, dimwit. Not unless there’s a whole bunch of them together.” She pointed off to the east where the landscape swelled to a series of low hills, each carpeted in thick forest.

I pictured a group of cartographers sitting together, each taking turns to try to draw a single tree.

I refrained from sharing this image.’ <giggle giggle>

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Hehe. Renn and his silly mind ;)

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Alexander Ipfelkofer's avatar

I love the humour in your writing, Nathan. Renn is a likeable "dimwit!" Unlike Noober from Baldur's Gate, who would follow you around, too...

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Hehe, thanks Alexander.

Noober! ... *transported back to 1998!*

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Alexander Ipfelkofer's avatar

I do what I can! ;)

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Dorinda's avatar

‘The trodden boots of time’...

Resonate...

Over to you!

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Claudia Befu's avatar

I love this story. Your writing is amazing.

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Jim Cummings's avatar

I'm late to the party, just trying to catch up with you guys. Love it so far. I'll just follow the hedge.

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Heh, thanks. I do love a good map.

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